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BobManPerson
06-01-2008, 08:02 PM
I did not write this poem. This was written by a kid who was (if I recall correctly) in 12th grade who committed suicide right before graduation. This was presumably his last poem. It is untitled in its original form. It is one of the most depressing, well-written, memorable poems I've ever read, and thought it belonged here.

He always wanted to explain things
But no one cared.
So he drew.
Sometimes he would draw and it wasn’t anything.
He wanted to carve it in stone or write it in the sky
And it would be only him and the sky and the things inside him that needed saying.
And it was after that he drew the picture.
He kept it under his pillow and
Would let no one see it.
And he would look at it every night
And think about it.
And when it was dark, and his eyes were closed,
He could still see it.
And it was all of him.
And he loved it.
When he started school he brought it with him.
Not to show anyone, just to have with him like a friend.
It was funny about school.
He sat in a square brown desk.
Like all other square, brown desks.
And he thought it should be red.
And his room was a square, brown room
Like all the other rooms.
And it was tight and close.
And stiff.
He hated to hold the pencil and chalk.
With his arm stiff and his feet flat on the floor.
Stiff,
With the teacher watching and watching.
She told him to wear a tie like all the other boys.
He said he didn’t like them.
And she said it didn’t matter!
After that they drew.
And he drew all yellow and it was the way he felt about morning.
And it was beautiful.
The teacher came and smiled at him.
“What’s this?” she said. “Why don’t you draw something like Ken’s drawing?
Isn’t that beautiful?”
After that his mother bought him a tie.
And he always drew airplanes and rocket ships like everyone else.
And he threw the old picture away.
And when he lay alone looking at the sky,
It was big and blue and all of everything,
But he wasn’t anymore.
He was square inside.
And brown.
And his hands were stiff.
And he was like everyone else.
And the things inside him that needed saying didn’t need it anymore.
It had stopped pushing.
It was crushed.
Stiff.
Like everyone else.

I'm pretty sure this is one sign that maybe school isn't the best thing for everyone.

MissTeach
06-01-2008, 09:17 PM
When I read this, it makes me believe that as teachers we need to use a variety of teaching techniques in our classroom. We also need to try and get to know each of our students! We need to allow our students to learn in the style most suited for them; we should not treat each student the same. It is a challenge to do this, but it is well worth the extra work and time.

AWOL
06-01-2008, 11:58 PM
This is a poem written by perhaps the best person in the world(to me), SoulRiser.

There used to be respect here
when it wasn't in demand
excellence in atmosphere
kindness all around
but advertising those facts
wouldn't work in this town

emphasizing other things
removing many choices
one by one they disappear
silencing our voices

you protect yourself from open minds
as you shrug the blame away
took a chance with one of a kind
and then lied to save your name

you started by ignoring
and slowly grew to greed
now all the good has fallen
because of one bad seed.

silvana
06-02-2008, 12:17 AM
I like the poem AWOl......=)

AWOL
06-02-2008, 12:36 AM
^^. It's by SoulRiser. Thank her. I can find lots more poems by the way. Such as:

It's never gonna be enough,
I do my best, they just laugh
They're always on my back
No matter what, I always lack
Perfection
They say I'm smart, they say I'm bright
Then I fail and they start a huge fight
Can't ever let it go if I get it wrong,
They want me perfect, want me just right
This is my life, I'll do what I like
Come the day that I've had it all
My bag'll go flying, out the door
And me out the window of the seventh floor.

and:

You're sitting in your office from 9 to 5
You've never felt so un-alive
Depressed and sad in your car
Happiness have never felt so far

You thought school would make you smart
but all they did was tear you apart
Forced you to follow the stupid rules
made all the kids brainwashed fools

It's an uneducated nation
built on lies and threats
school's not an education
it fills me with regrets

they say success is getting rich
But I want to make a switch
I only wanna follow my dreams
but I'm blocked by teacher-teams

They force me to learn what I don't need
history's not what what I wanna read
"I'm an adult and you're just a kid"
"What you want is all forbid"

It's an uneducated nation
built on lies and threats
school's not an education
it fills me with regrets

It's a bit fractured in grammar. But just a bit. The first one was by xavveri and the second was by roberterher

SiobhanMarie
06-02-2008, 04:05 AM
I think that all people should be open to different levels and types of education, and the mainstream schooling is not for everyone... and I believe that all students, teachers and everyone involved in a community should have the opportunity to creatively express their feelings and emotions without being ridiculed.

hotprincess
08-23-2008, 03:19 PM
This poem reminded me of the picture book "The Art Lesson" by Tomie DePaola. The boy was told to use only the crayons from the box of 8 crayons. He was not allowed to use the crayons he had from the box of 64 crayons.

If you have an elementary school-aged class or children of your own, you should get that book!

Brit
08-24-2008, 05:06 AM
my mom used to constantly refrence the DePaola poem to me when I was younger. I hated it. I mean, YES, creativity should be fostered, but really, not to the exclusion of all else. My mom really didn't have perspective, and I'd hate for perspective to be lost. YES! be creative! But remember that we're also working on learning how to follow directions, recognize colours, and develop fine motor skills, so sometimes a flower needs to be red and a tree needs to be green and a picture needs to look just so. Of course, not all the time. Time for creativity and expression is important!

putting away soapbox.

teacher5
08-24-2008, 10:55 AM
Brit- I am with you 100% of the way. There needs to be time built in for choices and creative outlets. But there are certain socialization behaviors and work & study habits that need to be developed and learned at an early age, if students are going to meet with success in the real world.

Clearly Canadian
08-25-2008, 07:01 AM
All those poems are so touching and true. Thanks for posting them, I'm going to include them in my poetry unit this year!

joshmon80
08-25-2008, 07:45 AM
That is quite an interesting poem. I agree with MissTeach. It is a shame the way our society tries to shape people. We tend to want everybody to be like everybody else instead of promoting uniqueness, creativity, and individuality